who are they and why should we care about them or want them together? Porn WHERE ARE THE PARENTS? where is the background and character development? WHAT KIND OF SEXUAL EXPERIENCE DO THEY HAVE. DO THE PARENTS FIND OUT? WHO ARE THEY? HOW OLD ARE THEY? WHAT KIND OF SEXUAL EXPERIENCE DO THEY HAVE. WHERE ARE THE PARENTS? HOW OLD ARE THEY? WHO ARE THEY? A longer build up would help, i.e. WHERE ARE THEY? YOU NEED A LOT MORE DETAIL AND AND A MUCH LONGER CHAPTER TO TELL THE STORY. where is the background and character development? It stands good on its own but I’d like to see you edit it and add more.
