You committed a MASSIVE continuity error. XXX 26 comments«12345»Anonymous readerReport 2014-03-01 06:00:35u need to pay more attention to parts one and twoAnonymous readerReport 2014-01-26 00:33:34I agree age is now confusingdivinemarleyReport 2014-01-15 10:19:40wow. i like some of the action hereanonymous readerReport 2013-09-01 22:39:47I think you really need to pay better attention to your writing. The story itself isn’t particularly well developed and some inconsistencies – for example, age of Jimmy in first part, then he and sister are twins in 2nd part.«12345» The story itself isn’t particularly well developed and some inconsistencies – for example, age of Jimmy in first part, then he and sister are twins in 2nd part.«12345» i like some of the action hereanonymous readerReport 2013-09-01 22:39:47I think you really need to pay better attention to your writing.
