Take it to the final phase and then end it. Spell check please, and greater story formulation wouldn’t hurt.anonymous readerReport 2013-05-21 06:38:58Take time to proof your stories. Pornhat You have the idea in the back of your head you just don’t know how to tell your fingers to type it in. Your doing fine, don’t give up. Just a little harder to do proof reads when you’re on a kindle touch.anonymous readerReport 2013-05-21 11:46:07It really needs a rewrite. Keep going just slow down.«1» When you get this far continue on with your story as you just dropped it off a cliff the first time. Keep going just slow down.«1» 5 comments«1»anonymous readerReport 2013-05-25 10:35:10A Great story Thanks for posting.anonymous readerReport 2013-05-21 12:07:00Where to start ??
