please make the story longer and get into the acts slower to get the suspense going first.READERReport 2006-06-11 05:38:30to short but really good, needs to be more descriptive… Sex video please make the story longer and get into the acts slower to get the suspense going first.READERReport 2006-06-11 05:38:30to short but really good, needs to be more descriptive… Thanx everyone for your imput…part 2 is comn soon!«12» Thanx everyone for your imput…part 2 is comn soon!«12» Thanx everyone for your imput…part 2 is comn soon!«12» please make the story longer and get into the acts slower to get the suspense going first.READERReport 2006-06-11 05:38:30to short but really good, needs to be more descriptive… Other than that it was decent at best.READERReport 2006-06-14 16:23:14I think this story is all right for a first time writer.
