Basic stuff like this is dull, but still important.anonymous readerReport 2011-09-29 19:41:06great story, bit slow to get started but got better«1» 2 comments«1»BlackRoninReport 2011-10-25 05:12:26This is not bad, but sloppy. Basic stuff like this is dull, but still important.anonymous readerReport 2011-09-29 19:41:06great story, bit slow to get started but got better«1» Grammar, spelling, and syntax are pretty rundown, and it inhibits the story. XXX Basic stuff like this is dull, but still important.anonymous readerReport 2011-09-29 19:41:06great story, bit slow to get started but got better«1» Grammar, spelling, and syntax are pretty rundown, and it inhibits the story. 2 comments«1»BlackRoninReport 2011-10-25 05:12:26This is not bad, but sloppy. Grammar, spelling, and syntax are pretty rundown, and it inhibits the story. Grammar, spelling, and syntax are pretty rundown, and it inhibits the story.
